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>but I felt like a fair bit of it was falling into the trap here
Thats the hardest part of writing romance, I do my fair share of flowery prose in romance scenes as well, but it's important to leave those chapters at that: Chapters. When the entire story is like that it just gets a bother to read, I'll admit I dropped off a bit after the confrontation of Keine/Mokou with the Heida clan mostly cause I didn't have time to read, but now that i'm back to it I have to force myself to read it again. The recent POV shifts have been a godsend.and actually made me want to go through the 3ish threads I missed.
>suddenly you're reading about a 2hu-shaped character
The only way i've found to counter it is to shut off the prose and focus on the actions until it's time to go all introspective. Theres plenty of time for fluff romance, but only as a treat after you finish all your PLOT

And here we go boys, the birthday arc starts in earnest!

Everyone should be welcome to include their own things and chapters to the party itself especially Mimafag, Ayafag, and any secondary writers as well!
Our little loveable goofball of a rape victim already almost spilled her spaghetti several times over in just the walk over, let see how it all goes down(?)hill form here!

And of course, anyone not listed in the short list of names here is welcome to burst in at the final moment.